Solid Hearts and Shy Faces (2008)

Bubbly personalities lead
to happy hearts

Dull persons open to iron
hearts with no resent

Shy girls and boys are
the sweetest you’ll ever
lay eyes on

Angry hearts are filled
with a void that can
only be filled by

a
single
thing

love&kindness

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2 thoughts on “Solid Hearts and Shy Faces (2008)”

  1. nice, in the 4th stanza, i would have tryed to find another would have tryed to find another word for filled the first time its used, but then agen, I know just about nothing when it comes to writing poetry, or pritty much anything ells

  2. took me a while to think of a word, but i would agree with Jesse. replace the first “filled” with “caressed” let me know what u think. it seems like it would read better with

    “angry hearts are caressed / with a void that can / only be filled by”

    just a suggestion. :)

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